Danny

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November 29 2006

Okay so I finally am able to post my poem that was chosen.


But first, I will let you read the story I was gonna go with before I decided to do a poem.


The Reject:


"I love you. Is that an okay start? Discovery. What a topic. Will you allow me to speak of the Discovery of my love for you-the discovery of what love is and how love feels?


To a child, love in omniscient. My cousin goes to school every day (he's in preschool, you know) and spreads love everywhere-to his little friends, to his teachers, and even to his enemies (at that age, enemies only last a second, of course. Children know nothing about grudges).


To a person experienced with age, love may not be as artless but is just as pure. As my grandmother observes her children, and her children's children, and even the next generation after that, adoration covers every wrinkle.


But to a person my age, love like a child's or a senior's hides from most. Yet somehow, I found what most miss. When we met, my life revolutionized. Morning dew settling on fresh grass can not compare to how subtlely your presence invaded my heart.


Not even Walt Whitman could explain how true affection feels.


When I think of you, something....happens. Suddenly, I desire to be a better person (although no one complains about my persona). Every stroke of my lead against paper produces a masterpiece.





Okay. So I didn't like that, or at least, I though I could do better. So I began this poem.


The Chosen:


From The Chords



As your fingers curve ever slightly over the strings,


My heart blooms to catch the nectar from your melody


I discover what love feels like all over again


And my affections emerge to spread their fresh wings.




Recollection of this adoration's beginning escapes my mind


One day I just knew it true


Caught in a butterfly net of no encampment, my soul lays bared for your contentment.


I would have it no other way.




Softer and lighter than the descent of morning dew


Your presence invaded my heart.


Abolishing wards, vanquishing safeguards


Like a bluejay you nestled and there remained.




"I love you" dawns from between your lips occasionally,


The potency of the triplet is registered not within you.


In return, "I love you too" is voiced in which my entire spirit lies.


Your expression as pensive as The Thinker himself.




A different chord blends with my soul in the composed atmosphere


As my persona aims for extreme amiability


Aims to harmonize with your angelic lifestyle


Aims to prove my worth and value




The climax of your aria brings the heart essence tumbling from my eyes


I care not of the thoughts spoken on the outside.


All that subsists in the scope is you and me


The performance slows and ultimately concludes




Love- my discovery- renewed and revived


Catapults towards you, eager for your acceptance


Always eager for your acceptance,


Till the end of me




With the instrument-d'amour packed away, you resume your normal life


While the one who uncovered the secret of this limited existence tucks away his tears


Soothes his aching heart


Waiting for the perfect time to expose


How much he loves you."



In truth, I just realized it's not as heart-wrenching as I would want it to be. But I've read it 20 times or more.


What do you think?


I love you, and one day you will know.


Danny

holly

December 04 2006
absolutly. beautiful.